Begining to Dead

Okay so this is just a short story i had to write for my grade 1 drama exam it was ment to be like an advert i past but my teacher didn't really like the story so i wanted to see what others think .....


On the 31st October twins were born the a mother that was showing no signs of pregnancy ,but one was born still the other was left alone and somehow survived ,but with the help of some one ,her dead brother .
He may be dead but his spirt has no end and lives on in Purgatory.

He's to good for hell but to bad for heaven but heaven or hell has to take him or they will both colide and end Purgatory ,end the chance for the bad to turn good ,It's up to the living to change the dead



let me know what you think .. xx

Sounds creepy..

I understand what you mean by teachers not liking your work... my teacher said my stories were too gory and descriptive... isn't that the idea???

yeah whats really funny though is 2 of the younger girls in the group i think a scared of me :S

haha! Nothing wrong with being the scary one xD
I am in my college.. walking around in my full length leather coat, goggles and gas mask xDDD

i always get stared at in school and we have a uniform so people judge so because have a fringe that covers my eyes and really thick eyeliner people atomaticaly asume im a bad person XD lol

Hmm since this is the story section... maybe you should put it up on here thats what it is for hehe